Oh Autumn,
with your cautiously elegant pallet.
While they named you for the
way you fall,
and the storm of leaves from your trees.
I find you to be,
more of a floating
In this pile of reds oranges and cremes.
Oh Autumn, with your cautiously elegant pallet. While they named you for the way you fall, and the storm of leaves from your trees. I find you to be, more of a floating In this pile of reds oranges and cremes. |
Author's Comments
**-*EDIT*-**
Thanks to =wildmonky for his suggestion. the italicized text has been altered to make a correct sentence. Written about my love for this season, and the change as it happens.  pay attention to the italicized words.  Comments
 I think you captured autumn very well.
  Not usually a fan of rhyming, but you pulled it off here.
I expected the italics to make a sentence! They didn't  -- All sapient beings evade what evolution shaped us for. --Larry Niven "Oh, autumn while you fall
I find, floating." thanks for the comment man, appreciate it. -- Ameas Qua. ok, it makes a sentence that i don't get
 -- All sapient beings evade what evolution shaped us for. --Larry Niven well thank you very much
-- Ameas Qua. yeah well fuck.
it makes sense to me, maybe i should work the italics to make a little more sense... lol. i thought it summed up the idea of the poem, that was what I was going for anyway. -- Ameas Qua.  it's the "i find, floating" that doesn't make sense. You can't find a present participle! Or a gerund. Not just by themselves. A floating what? Fix it!
-- All sapient beings evade what evolution shaped us for. --Larry Niven -- Ameas Qua. |
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